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I slowly sigh
Angels surely cry
Turn the other eye
We will surely die  
Why would you let us die
Do you want to die
All under a scarlet sky?

We’ll go on a cruise
We’ll sail through the sky
It won’t take long
We’ll surely die
The land goes by
The people sigh
For we will die
All under a scarlet sky.

Fire flies
Through the skies
Everybody dies  
The river lowly lies
Everybody sighs  
A thousand dreams goodbye
A thousand dead will lie
All under a scarlet sky.


The sky isn’t falling
The sky is red
From the skies they have fallen
The ground is red
You’re so pretty
But we’re all dead
We’re so silly
In this world of red.  

I couldn’t have cried
I already died
In the blink of an eye
The scarlet’s in the sky  
We’re all gone
The world is alone
It’s a very bleak and vacant home.  

I wish I could sigh again
To breathe again and live again
But instead I died today
I lied still today, and bled today.  

The reddened gleam
The twisted smile
Gods are laughing all the while
We all have died
The Angels cried
Gods must have surely sighed
While we fell and died
All under a scarlet sky.

When I stand alone
In my hometown city
I wish the world
Was still so pretty,

But it’s dead.
©2004-2009 ~FrozenSmile
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It was sort of strange how I made this, in the sense that I consciously know five seperate and very different influences that made me create this poem.

This poem started out both as a psychological release and a sort of reflection.

Through editing, I came up with this.
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I think it's amazing.....the way you just rework the same thoughts over and over and then the very last line...:nod: beautiful.

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It's the end of the world as we know it
and I feel fine
I'm listening to NIN now, and when I was posting the poem, and just before I hit submit, "The Day the Whole World Went Away" came on. I love coincidences like this.

Glad you liked it, love. :D
haha Trent....so wonderful.

Glad you wrote it, love. :giggle:

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It's the end of the world as we know it
and I feel fine
This is absolutly fantastic. I love the final ending
Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it.

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This night is filled with cries
Of Dispossessed children
In search of Paradise
it's beautiful and depressing. may i offer just one suggestion, though? in the first verse, you repeat "die" three times in a row. perhaps some other words would work just as well?

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found religion inside myself
i drank the blood, the flesh was stale
Perhaps, but the repetition was supposed to drill the word somewhat into the reader's head.

But it's true that it doesn't really flow with the rest of the poem, and while maybe I should change it, I can't say I rightly know what I would change it too.

Oh well. Thanks for your input.

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This night is filled with cries
Of Dispossessed children
In search of Paradise
This poem is amazing! I love everything about it...you made it sound like a song =D I bet you could make it into one. Anyway...I love it :love:
has a sense of numbness, only the lingering reflection of the past. When you look back in numbness nothing hurts you are just trying to put the piece together in a pause....

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"mejor estar solo que en mala compañía"
"better to be alone than in bad company"

mexican proverb

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Oh my... the way this flows and boils down to the final words is so beautifully done. There isn't one thing I can say to bring this down or to perfect it, for it has reached perfection at ease.

Quite the talented one aren't you?
You are an inspiration to me might I add. Wonderful work.

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Metaphor for a missing moment..
Pull me in to your perfect cirlce

~APC

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